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title: 英文添削 9/18
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英文添削 9/18
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## Original
I was born in Hiroshima and then moved to Fukuoka when I was a kid. I actually consider both as my hometown and as it happens, they have many characteristics in common such as robust food cultures, devoted baseball fans, iconic dialects, etc. But for me, the most favorite trait is that their people love their own city, which by the way cannot be seen very much in here Kanto area. I have never seen people from Saitama or Chiba, for example, refer to their hometown in a good way. But it is not the case in my hometowns. I think there are two reasons for that. Firstly, as I have mentioned, they have absolute unique cultures of which their people are very proud in nature. Secondly, the fact makes them more attractive that they are the biggest city in their own region, so people, goods, money and information are supposed to be all together.


## Correction with Comments
I was born in Hiroshima and then moved to Fukuoka when I was a kid. I actually consider both as my hometown and as it happens, they have many characteristics in common such as robust food cultures, devoted baseball fans, iconic dialects, etc.

But for me, the most favorite trait is that ~~their~~ **the** people love their ~~own city~~ **hometown**, which by the way ~~cannot be seen very much~~ **is not common** in here Kanto area.
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⭐️their city→their hometown
⭐️cannot be seen→is not common、seeは、視覚の要素が強いため
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I ~~have never seen people~~ **don't know anybody, for example** from Saitama or Chiba ~~, for example,~~ refer to their hometown**s** in a good way. But it is not the case in my hometowns. I think there are two reasons for that. Firstly, as I have mentioned, they **both** have **an** absolute**ly** unique culture~~s~~ ~~of~~ which ~~their~~ **makes** people ~~are~~ **feel** very proud ~~in nature~~.
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⭐️make people proudの方がつながりが良い
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Secondly, ~~the fact~~ **Hiroshima and Fukuoka are both the biggest cities in their regions which** makes them more attractive ~~that they are the biggest city in their own region, so~~ as people, goods, money and information ~~are supposed to be all together~~ **filters into them from the surrounding regions**.
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⭐️最後忘れてると思うのでもう一度、広島、福岡の名前を出す
⭐️Filters into themにしました
⭐️surroundingをつけることにより周辺地域の意味を際立たせました
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## After Correction
I was born in Hiroshima and then moved to Fukuoka when I was a kid. I actually consider both as my hometown and as it happens, they have many characteristics in common such as robust food cultures, devoted baseball fans, iconic dialects, etc. But for me, the most favorite trait is that the people love their hometown, which by the way is not common in here Kanto area. I don’t know anybody, for example from Saitama or Chiba refer to their hometowns in a good way. But it is not the case in my hometowns. I think there are two reasons for that. Firstly, as I have mentioned, they both have an absolutely unique culture which makes people feel very proud. Secondly, Hiroshima and Fukuoka are both the biggest cities in their regions which makes them more attractive as people, goods, money and information filters into them from the surrounding regions. 
