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# 英文作文批改

I'm Pei-Yun, Wu, a freshman studying CSIE in TKU. I like to play guitar and Rubik's cube, and write codes in my free time.
Growing up in a family with workaholic parents, located in Taipei, makes me independant and creative since I enjoyed so much freedom during childhood. Both of my parents work in a semiconductor company. For me, carrying a bunch of prototypes back home everyday is the best thing they did for me. By disassembling those prototypes, I found that I was interested in figuring out how components work in technology products.
Furthermore, I started to learn coding when I was in 5th grade and build projects for school. I set a goal for myself to become a software engineer working for an international company since I was young. With the passion for creating new stuff through coding, I believe that I'll achieve my goals in the future.
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中括弧 [ ] 標示出之字元，為增補或修改後的內容。 I'm Pei-Yun[] Wu, a freshman studying CSIE in TKU. I like to play guitar and Rubik's cube, and write codes in my free time. [Owing to the freedom I enjoyed as a child and g]rowing up in a family with workaholic parents, located in Taipei, [I have become] independ[e]nt and creative[]. Both of my parents work in a semiconductor company. For me, carrying a bunch of prototypes back home everyday is the best thing they did for me. By disassembling those prototypes, I found that I was interested in figuring out how components work in technology products. Furthermore, I started to learn coding when I was in 5th grade and build projects for school. I [have aspired to] become a software engineer working for an international company since I was young. With the passion for creating new stuff through coding, I believe that I'll achieve my goals in the future. 修改建議： 1. 一般來說，名子中的姓置於前方時，才會搭配逗號使用。 2. 原文第二句建議可透過調整語序，來讓因果關係更明確。 3. “since” 用作連接詞表達「自某時起...」時，建議可以搭配「完成式」表達。像是倒數第二句。