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title: Writing Practice 20240522
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> Resource: ['Office culture' as we know it is dead. Workers have other ideas](https://www.bbc.com/worklife/article/20240229-office-culture-is-dead)
> [time=May. 22nd, 2024]

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## Archie
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    Some kinds of office cultures are cool and attractive, but due to the development of technology, and globalization, we are facing severe challenges, we need to compete with people from everywhere, and this makes us have to think about our basic needs, in other words, we are more focused on the things that can bring us benefits and wellbeing in our lives, not just only in our jobs.
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**Member Comment**
- Make your paragraph clearly, like "but due to... we..." should be different sentences. [name=Vincent]
- The modified essay [name=Archie]
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        Some kinds of office cultures are cool and attractive, but there are still some things we have to consider before, according to the development of technology, and globalization, we are facing severe challenges, we need to compete with people from everywhere, and this makes us have to think about our basic needs, in other words, we are more focused on the things that can bring us benefits and wellbeing in our lives, not just only in our jobs.
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## Azura
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For many people, the office perks which people pursuit now is not only concerning about physical office facilities or team-building exercises. Employee advocate flexible work, equitable pay, fitable humanity and more autonomy after workers had experienced to arrange their schedule in working days during Covid-19 pandemic. Work-life balance would be more vital for personal development and health consideration, otherwise what people really desire is more money to survive and less work to rest.
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**Member Comment**
- "pursuit" is a noun. [name=Vincent]
- "pursue" is a verb. [name=Azura]
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## Bessy
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    After experiencing the throes of the COVID-19 pandemic, people taste the benefits of working at home, like more flexibility and accessibility, but also the cons -- a feeling of isolation and disconnect from work, blurring of boundaries (working longer hours and on weekends), etc. More and more people are starting to think about work-life balance. Perhaps, instead of building a cool office culture, companies should be more concerned with the worker's needs.
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**Member Comment**
- Try to use more difficult vocabulary, not just "more and more". [name=Vincent]
    - `The growing number of employees` are starting to think about work-life balance.
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## Gary
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In my opinion, I think both office culture has their own advantages. The traditional office culture is good for sociality and it can help some people who is weak on self-discipline to stay in working mode. The new office culture is good for employee to handle their time more flexibility and reduce some meaningless social behavior. It is nice for someone have self-discipline. In my situation, I think the traditional office culture will be more suitable for me, due to I am weak on self-discipline. The traditional office culture can help me focus on working mode.
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**Member Comment**
- I think that the santence "The traditional... and it can help" can be improved with the word "while", like "... while it can help". [name=Vincent]
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## Janice
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     I think pandemic is a turning point in changing office culture.In fact, many young people are not keen on office culture but have no opportunity to change, and after working remotely during the pandemic, many companies still continue this measure.
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**Member Comment**
- the pandemic is "the" turning point. [name=Vincent]
- I think using 'covid-19 pandemic' will be sutiable then only using pandemic. Since 'pandemic' is too genral for all type of pandemic, people maybe can't understand which pandemic you are talking for. [name=Gary]
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## Karen
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<Personal Leave>
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**Member Comment**
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## Vincent
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     As a part of Gen Z workforce, I have experienced two different office cultures which represents traditional industrial culture and 'flexible' culture respectively. Either culture, each has advantages and disadvantages. I always remember there was a time when my predecessor superior ask me to attend to an 'entertainment event', which was hold on weekend and declared it as the 'company perk'. However, to put things in perspective, the working way of post-pandemic can be a blessing in disguise that can reduce costs for firms.
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