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> Resource: [From WhatsApp to Greggs - why is tech going down more?
](https://www.bbc.com/news/articles/cxrz350qyy5o)
> [time=May. 1st, 2024]

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## Archie
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    Nowadays, the Internet is becoming more and more convenient than before, but on the other hand, it is also getting more fragile, just like a glass bead, having a gorgeous looking, but any accident will make it crack.
    To reach the blance of maintaining and developing, the internet should be upgrade to next generation, but it is very hard to let it come true without any mistakes, and I hope the day of the internet revolution is getting closer.
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**Member Comment**
- You have some vocabulary wrong like "balance". [name=Vincent]
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## Azura
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    The news mentioned several cases of IT outages has been occured for last few years. Whether a bakery company announced thier branchs had happened card payment outages or the daily internet services provided by tech giants were forced interrupted, these accidents caused users inconvenient to aceess their data or to comunicate with others. 
     These issues must be overcame to response the sudden strikes uasge of service and update the  outdated polocies to  improve usability of related services. 
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**Member Comment**
- It's "occurred" instead of "occured".  [name=Vincent]
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## Bessy
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    The reasons that result in "IT outages" are many, including typos in code, electricity shortages, natural disasters affecting data centers, etc. As the company grows, more and more layers are added to the existing services which makes the system architecture more weak and more complicated. This kind of "technical debt" not only increases the risk of going wrong but also makes engineer hard to fix it in a short time when facing it.
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**Member Comment**
- The phrase "are many" is written with the Chinese grammar. [name=Vincent]
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## Gary
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    I think reason of why is tech going down more is the technology will facing a bottleneck in few years. Since the computer’s parts making process is almost reach their limit, unless they can get a breakthrough of it. I think quantum computer may become that breakthrough but still far from civil use in few years.
    One of the best examples of technical debt is ‘Windows OS’ which is the most common operating system in world. It has a lot of old technic binding in their system. Even they keep upgrade their system but they never try to improve or fix those old function which make their OS bigger and bigger.
    

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**Member Comment**
- "I think the reason that lead to a bottleneck of the technology in recent years is ..." [name=Bessy]
    - Thank you for suggestion. [name=Gary]
- Is this one better? "I think the cause of the bottleneck of the technology in few years" [name=Archie]
    -  Thank you for suggestion but I think that is a little weird of grammar. [name=Gary]
- "I think the reason of the tech going down more is the bottleneck which the technology will face in recent years." [name=Vincent]

- "I think the reason that lead to tech going down more, is the technology facing bottleneck in these years." [name=Gary]

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## Janice
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     Many companies have moved their operations to the cloud, which can lead to big problems if internet service goes down, even big brands like Greggs, Apple, and Meta have been struggling with service outages recently. And when everyone tries to log back on at once, it only makes things worse. 

     The internet's getting more complex with new tech and more layers, which means more things can go wrong. We've got issues like coding errors, hardware problems, cyber attacks, and even bad weather impacting services.

     The internet's running on some old tech which makes things risky. Even small mess-ups can cause big problems, making it tough to keep services smooth and reliable.

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**Member Comment**
- You should have 5 spaces before each paragraph. [name=Vincent]
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## Karen
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    This article mentioned the outage of the services. As a user, I would be slightly bothered without using the Internet.But it didn't make me do more research about this issue. It is related to hardware, power failure, cyber attacks, and weather. For now, everything could make the Internet shut down and influence our basic techniques.It needs more people do a lot of care about this issue, and find out the approach to make over it.  
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**Member Comment**
- You need to add a space after the period. [name=Bessy]
- Try to avoid the word "but" as the beginning of a sentance. [name=Vincent]
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## Vincent
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     The article recalled me about nuclear power plant problem, which had been discussed in the last decade. Increasing of network using amount makes the cost on electricity has the possitive correlation growth. However, the commercial situation in Taiwan has no differences from other countries. Antiquated equipments, stale policy, these are the reason that makes execution effect become otiose. I believe that the outage problem has multiple reason and it should be fixed within a decade.
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**Member Comment**
- <1 Sentence Comment> [name=someone]
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